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#1 Raymond

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Posted 23 January 2008 - 09:09 AM

General: Raymond
Soldiers: 2
Properties: -
Vehicles: -
Motto: We protect the country from rebels and gangsters!

Background Story:
World War III has erupted. The human population and dominance is at the brink of extinction. Every country is fighting each other. America is at war again with Japan. No place is safe to run nor let alone hide. No one can be trusted, no where is safe, not even the Corrupted Government. Bullets, explosions and missiles fill the evening skies as the unrest continues to rise. One man stands in the way of World War III proceeding to the destruction of the remaining life on Earth, his name is Raymond...he is a soldier, with enough gun wounds to prove his strength and he needs your help. Join his gang, Soldiers and bring back peace to Earth.

Turf:
Liberty Campus Base, Liberty City
Fort Baxter Air Base, Vice City
Area 61 Desert Base, San Andreas

Clothing:
Camouflage Army Suits
Army Fatigues

Soldiers Recruitment

General Assistant: 500 posts ++ (or $5,000 and above)
Slot 1: -
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Commander: 250 posts ++ (or $2,500 and above)
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Commander Assistant: 150 posts ++ (or $1,500 and above)
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3 Star Elite: 100 posts ++ (or $1,000 and above)
Slot 1: -
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2 Star Elite: 75 posts ++ (or $750 and above)
Slot 1: -
Slot 2: -

1 Star Elite: 70 posts ++ (or $700 and above)
Slot 1: -
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Soldiers Team Leader: 60 posts ++ (or $600 and above)
The Godfathers Team: -
The Dons Team: -
The Kingpins Team: -
The Bosses Team: -

Soldiers: 60 posts and below (or $600 and below)
The Godfathers Team:
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The Dons Team
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The Kingpins Team
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The Bosses Team
Slot 1: johnny-kazuki
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Edited by Raymond, 02 February 2008 - 02:52 AM.

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#2 Hansui

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Posted 23 January 2008 - 11:29 AM

reminds me of the soldiers at Vice City, anyway, good luck to your gang (actually you're too demanding for those high positions, there were only few guys here who had over 1000 posts)

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#3 GTA Don

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Posted 23 January 2008 - 03:58 PM

You're not going to get any members with those requirements. You need to lower them down. You don't even have 400 posts!

Yeah, good luck from the whole of LCF.

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#4 Ivan

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Posted 23 January 2008 - 04:31 PM

You said the world was living in peace and that Nuclear usage was less but in this year there was the Cold War and that Cuban Missile Crisis so your story is bad, change that and it will be better.
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#5 Airashii

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Posted 23 January 2008 - 04:32 PM

This is not looking bad at all.

I like this, it's a bit more original than all those Mafia gangs/factions.

I too would alter the requirements slightly but other than that, looking good.

Good luck!
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#6 Jace

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Posted 23 January 2008 - 08:09 PM

I think it looks pretty good actually.

If you wish I could correct all the grammar in your background story and I'd change the demands too. People with 2500 posts usually are already in a big gang you know.



If you need some cash to get the gang started, just tell me.

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#7 V

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Posted 23 January 2008 - 08:14 PM

Not to be offensive, but this looks surprisingly nice.

Well done and best of luck.

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#8 GTA Don

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Posted 23 January 2008 - 08:17 PM

Yeah, Raymond. You need to create a chat topic and lower your demands to like 250+ posts or something.

Edited by GTA Don, 01 February 2008 - 05:17 PM.

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#9 Ivan

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Posted 23 January 2008 - 08:19 PM

I think this is original but I only said there was a very unrealistic part of his story.
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#10 TM™

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Posted 23 January 2008 - 08:21 PM

You have a point there Jace. I was going to say this, but had no time to. If I think about it, members that would want to join your gang would have to be really active if they want that high position. Plus, it would lead to spamming, which is bad.

If members want to be part of the General Assistants group, it's going to be hard to get members to it, but most members wouldn't go for these recommendations you've given since most of these requirements are high. Members would be driven away from it, and you wouldn't want that to happen, do you?

I'll help you out on this, so here's what you MIGHT want to change:

  • The requirements for the positions - 500 posts are pretty high recommendations. You should adjust it below to at least 100 posts or less if you ask me.
  • Get some Graphics - That's probably what all gangs have, so I believe you'll be getting some soon, right? All you might need is atleast 2 signatures, 2 avatars and a banner for the page.

That's pretty much all that I can think up. Other than that, everything looks completely fine. You could edit the story a little, it's a bit unrealistic, but your gang is probably original since it's not based on real-life gangs which are present today.

So, if any problems, just get in contact with me or post in the Gang System Forum which can be located here.
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#11 Dirty Harry

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Posted 23 January 2008 - 08:24 PM

The gang story isn't very bad, congratulations Raymond...


To all others who like to scatter newbies of the way, see what this guy has done, actually a nice gang!

Good luck.
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#12 Raymond

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Posted 24 January 2008 - 02:48 AM

edited

the person who had posts (or $) that had beaten my requirements, i will promote them to the higher rank they can

soldiers is the lowest rank after all ;)
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#13 GTA Don

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Posted 24 January 2008 - 08:56 PM

Raymond, where's your background story gone?

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#14 Raymond

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Posted 25 January 2008 - 02:01 AM

lost, wait for me edit it again, im thinking to make a suitable story
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#15 GTA Don

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Posted 26 January 2008 - 11:03 AM

Yeah, Raymond. You need to create a Chat Topic as well.

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#16 KyleIce45

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Posted 28 January 2008 - 04:08 PM

Good luck with your gang Inferno!

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#17 GTA Don

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Posted 28 January 2008 - 04:22 PM

Umm... He changed his to name Raymond.

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#18 KyleIce45

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Posted 28 January 2008 - 05:39 PM

Umm... He changed his to name Raymond.

I know. But I've known him first as Inferno. So I call him Inferno. :rolleyes:

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Posted 29 January 2008 - 03:26 PM

Raymond,<br /><br />Like everyone else is saying, please lower your minimum requirements; maybe 200-300 then you'll probably get some potential members.<br /><br />And Raymond, you could minimize some of the positions available, such as having less positions then start a steady growth pattern as the gang grows. What I'm saying is, when people start coming to your gang, make more vacant positions to attract more members.<br /><br />There is also the responsibility or taking care of the gang; Making sure the chat thread for Soldiers stays intact and on topic to minimize spamming and flame. If you would like I can help you monitor your gang chat thread to help get Soldiers off it's feet. You should also be prepared to answer any questions member's ask in relation to your gang, such as positions, making up your mind to choose who's right for your gang and anything else.<br /><br />And the best of luck with Soldiers.

Edited by αzи, 30 January 2008 - 02:12 AM.

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Posted 29 January 2008 - 09:05 PM

For your post requirements I wouldn't exeed 500 posts if I were you.

And do you still want some forum points to start with?

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